This is my first rough draft of my public space analysis essay. I chose to write the assignment on the Barnes and Noble store in the University Park Plaza shopping center. I like this specific location as opposed to the TCU Barnes and Noble for many reasons. First, this Barnes and Noble is much larger than the TCU location. It also offers a much wider range of merchandise. Also, there is a bigger variety of people that go to the location in the University Park Plaza store because the TCU bookstore mostly attracts students. This Barnes and Noble location has plenty of interesting things about the space that would be interesting to observe and analyze.
Although I was able to find many interesting details about the space to write about, I feel that writing style is very plain and does not make the Barnes and Noble sound as fascinating as I actually found it to be. I struggle with creative writing so my paper seems very uniform and boring. I feel like many of my sentences throughout the paper sound the same because I had a difficult time trying to describe the all the different features of the space in a unique and interesting manner.
When writing this rough draft, I also struggled with trying to figure out how to order the essay while describing the space. I started off the description from the parking lot, then entering the store, and then I described everything on the right side of the store, and then everything on the left side of the store. I wrote about the register last. I tried to write the essay in order of the spatial organization of the store, but I am unsure if the reader will be able to realize that.
This essay was a very interesting assignment, unlike any other paper I have written before. I enjoyed going to Barnes and Noble and paying attention to the minor details of the store. I have been into Barnes and Noble dozens of times and I have never noticed the details before until I had to analyze the space for this paper.
The challenge of organizing a paper to best fit your audience and your purpose is a big one, and I'm glad you are taking these things into consideration.
ReplyDeleteThere are lots of approaches you can take w/r/t the organization - you could intersperse other patrons' behavior and observations you made about them into the paper, and use them to sort of move the reader through the space, or you could stick with the tried and true personal narrative style which doesn't necessarily require that you keep things in chronological order. So long as it makes sense how you make a jump from one concept to another, you are golden.