In Class Assignment, Feedback on Rough Draft

I received a lot of helpful feedback on my paper. Thesis statements are always the hardest part of writing a paper for me and Kayla gave me some great ideas on how to fix my thesis statement to make it better. She also gave me ideas on how to make my argument stronger. I need to better emphasize how Mean Girls relates to high school girls. She recommended that I maybe add a personal story about high school in my paper and relate it to Mean Girls. I need to work on making my paper more personal. She also pointed out that I need to work on my transitional sentences to help the flow of my paper. She also revised some sentences throughout my paper to make them clearer. I am going to keep all these recommendations in mind as I work on this paper. I still have a lot of work to do on my paper. It is incomplete and I need to make a lot of revisions to what I have so far.